
hmm.... I like this, but it seems disconected to me somehow. The first half and the second half almost seem like two different trains of thought.
Could be that the first is more structured and the second more free flowing?
----- Life is what happens while you wait for great things.
Life is what happens while you wait for great things.

Yeah, you make some good observations, Shan. I'm wondering if it's because the third stanza speaks so literally and directly to the subject whilst the preceding stanzas don't. I dunno. The rhythm of the piece is weird because I do that sometimes just to see what effect it has. Surprisingly, it usually has a weird effect...hehehehe...Thank you so much for giving me honest feedback. I appreciate it more than I can tell you....C