bitter-sweet (adult content)

she begs me

push a little deeper

move closed

taste her skin

slide down

breathe

perfect heaving breasts

gasping for air

flick my tongue

pelvis tilt

deeper still

middle finger slide

camera light green

she never breaks eye contact

ever the actress

I never break rhythm

perform to the crowd

bitter-sweet

skin to skin

interlocked

delicate kiss

teeth on my thigh

push deeper

Shan -

In S1 do you mean "Move Closer"?

I like this, I like sensual poetry.

I'm not fond of S2, L1, "heaving breasts" seem a bit cliche, Maybe a different way to say the same thing?

One other suggestion, add a word here or there to draw out the suspence

Just my two bits:)

----- Life is what happens while you wait for great things.

Life is what happens while you wait for great things.

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