Stigmata Diabolic

Accursed

That is I

My moon lies in the gutter
Stars like bloody wretches
Coil round my stink

I wander lonely as a cloud
Gutted by a church steeple
Embittered
Battered
Proud

Your mark lies upon me
See it jerking off to any sound
Waiting for you to come around
In the bathroom
Deep under covers

Despite my reputation
You know I'm just another tourniquet
Master and slave
To all that we can deprave

Holy Virgin
Let's take her down
Until she makes a moaning sound
Teach her all about her sin
Teach her what her children bring

My Temptress
My Goddess
For all I may cry
When you're not with me
I surely will lie

Lie here just bleeding
Bleeding my visions
See the puss in my eyes
It's no longer torture
More of a sigh

Spurious Being
My Amaranth
Let me keep bleeding
Until we both die

Kat -

this is completely engaging poetry......taut, powerful, brilliantly stark......friggin creatively stark......yet, even in the midst of such despairing words, the ending might be read as with a glimmer of hope......Amaranth never dies......and grows in the most unlikely of places.....and poetry......[Paradise Lost].....btw, I might delete the line "In the bathroom" and let the image flow straight to "Deep under covers"......imho......Kat

Mosquitobyte -

Thanks Kat, much appreciated.

I considered your thoughts on the bathroom but decided to keep it, after all, is it not a classic image - man jerking off into the bathroom sink......

Mos.

Kat -
a classic image??.......bogart with a cig hanging out of the corner of his mouth is a classic image......the sink thing -- we'll have to agree to disagree on that one

Aphasic -

My first impression is an evocation of the atmosphere that pervades 'Deep' (Pearl Jam), which must be a good thing (unless, of course, you happen to hate Pearl Jam :>)
I agree with Kat about the 'jerking off' stanza, but not with her suggestion. 'In the bathroom' is appropriately stark but, to me, the 'deep under covers' line is way too clichéd considering the naturally perverse nature of your stuff Mos.

A footnote diversion: I don't know if you're familiar with PJ's 'Ten', but I'll spew my irritation here anyway :> 'Jeremy' got the airplay, 'Black' was universally praised, but for me, those last three tracks (Garden, Deep & Release) finished that album off to perfection - almost as good a run as the first four tracks on Vitalogy. Ok - I'm all thrown-up now - thank you for your indulgence...

Oh, and yes, I've noticed your tendency towards 'structure' lately - it does make it tighter, and I think it adds intensity. Also, it suggests some consideration for the reader - so, you'd better ditch that shit before people start referring to you as a poet

On a less serious note - 'I wander lonely as a cloud'!! Yeh - I laughed...I remember starting something a while back back with 'I wandered lowly as a crowd/that seeks originality'

not that original, but it had some effect, as it does here (

'gutted by a church steeple')...

Mosquitobyte -

PMSL Aphasic, some good points. I admit, I have not specifically set out to right in a more structured manner, it just happens to be the way I've written my latest pieces. That being said, thanks for the back-handed compliment! :P

As for TEN, I have to agree with your summation, those last 3 tracks really do make the album as a whole.

Mos.