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Shakespeare's Monkeys

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silence comes unsuited

overhauled
I knew he could never stomach
the stillness of morning's
shadow and chamomile tea

his eyes whisper in pretense
carving the sudden shock of
defeat along the outline
of my restless skin

hands lie likewise against
lips I've postured still
unkempt by the hurried brush
of his feint affections

my noiseless fingers trace
the bone worn impositions that
leave brambles between our
spacious sheets

night falls heavily with
the crowd of words that
rage unspeakable behind his
clenched teeth

morning meets me with
the unmistakable silence of
lovers coming undone
Anstey - on June 27 2008
I hate when silence cums..leaves such a mess.
Anstey - on June 27 2008

apparently after silence came, it went.

The shift from S1 to S2, leaves ambiguity as to whether 'his' refers to morning or the un-named lover. In fact, my mind carried the ambiguity.throughout and I'm not sure whether that'sgood or bad.I suppose it partly depends whether that's what you wanted.Is the 'he' throughout a personification of the the morning?


Amanda Baker - on June 27 2008

what about...

 

I knew he could never stomach
the stillness of morning's
shadows and chaomile tea.
Mosquitobyte - on June 27 2008

Some great imagery here Mandi, along with a strong atmosphere which ably hints at the decay of things.

Mos.


Amanda Baker - on June 28 2008

Well.....you know me, I am full of decay and suffering

Thank you dear. 


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