
apparently after silence came, it went.
The shift from S1 to S2, leaves ambiguity as to whether 'his' refers to morning or the un-named lover. In fact, my mind carried the ambiguity.throughout and I'm not sure whether that'sgood or bad.I suppose it partly depends whether that's what you wanted.Is the 'he' throughout a personification of the the morning?

what about...
I knew he could never stomach
the stillness of morning's
shadows and chaomile tea.

Some great imagery here Mandi, along with a strong atmosphere which ably hints at the decay of things.
Mos.