This Is Me - Shakespeare's Monkeys

This Is Me

Hello to any reader (and I hope there may be one or two) I live in England and I write purely on an amateur basis. I am early retired living with my wife in the heart of the Cotswolds a countryside area in England.Have a small self published booklet containing verse of Love and nature pursuits. This Poem really is my interpretation of me. Take care. Dave

This Is Me

A quotidian time, never taken for granted,

Wandering England's loveliest countryside,

Field lush rich green of early spring,

Producing ripened golden corn in summer,

Through autumn I see vivid colour of wildlife and woodland,

Succumbing to virgin blankets of winter snow,

Creatures provide welcome company,

There are always joyous bird songs,

I crave no human presence whilst I roam,

My happiness is total isolation,

Sometimes my fantasy figure dances attention on me,

Nestles her cascading auburn hair against my shoulder,

Her green eyes sparkle,

In the sunlight, moonlight,starlight,whatever, whenever,

I feel loving with her and loved in return,

Our lips lightly brush, I reach out to touch but she is gone,

From fabulous heaven, to earthly heaven,

The return is complete,

A delicate Red Roe Deer stands not too far,

Watching me among the frondescence of burnished gold,

Distant sound of the hunting horns,

Signal the plight of an unknown fox,

I cry in frustration, as I cannot aid him,

Abject feelings re. manking ensue,

We are supposedly the "superior race"

Jesus, surely this was never your vision,

Shepherd us to idealism exuberance, contentment,

I try to live life to my standards, (fail)

Longing for the day justice will prevail,

An air of hope springs eternal in my heart,

moordykspot.

Comments

Leanne -
Dave, you paint a lovely picture and it's a pleasure to have you on board. Your kinship with the land is evident and you have a fine touch, although ideally I'd love to see a few of the more common phrases taken out of this and replaced with words that are more uniquely you. If you're interested in editing, I'd be happy to spend some time with you -- or, if not, I'm happy to read what you've written, enjoy it and leave you alone

Moordykspot -

Hi Leanne I am still fathoming out this site but some of the reads are quite remarkable. As you surmise as an amateur I need all the advice I can get and criricism my friend I take firmly on the chin.

Thanks for reply Dave

Leanne -
We're pretty gentle, don't fret! It's nearly bedtime here in Oz but I'll come back and give this a good going-over to give you something to work with -- in the meantime, maybe someone else will offer something even better.

Anne -

Hello Dave,

Welcome to Shakespeare's Monkeys-although you live close to Strattford-on-Avon-I am sure monkeys have their place there, yes?

In regards to editing this poem: I have learned after reading Dave's English style of writing, editing is not so simple as in our American style of writing. While revising is perhaps a "universal thing" one must be aware of other writing styles and cultures. It took me awhile to learn and understand this with this Englishman's writing. While poems can and should be edited, I always remember to regard that someone else's style and manner is not necessarily wrong or my own.

Anne

All my way, in my time, in my words, in myself.

Anstey -

I find that the best one can usually do, with regards to personal voices and styles, is to just offer your thoughts honestly and humbly and ask that the author always remember that first and foremost it is their poem. Once the advice and thoughts are given, I think it's best for a person to let go of it, it is not our work, it is the author's work. It's such an important part of criticism, and It's also so difficult.

Moordykspot -

Thankyou for commenting folks. When I submit to Shakespears Monkeys it is with the hope that someone can find some enjoyment from reading the verse. I take and indeed invite critique good or bad cos there is some rich talent (Anne) within poetry and I aspire to join it in some way.

However those who know me (or think they do) realise what an inflexible person I am and how once a project is finished I don't change it. Call it arrogance/ self belief not too sure. But I digest all comments in the hope they will allow me to improve.

Thanks again Dave