Rubbish - Shakespeare's Monkeys

rubbish

The taxes need to be done
of course
on the counter, the milk continues to be ignored
souring and expanding inside its container

the bedding's been washed
the rubbish removed

her flesh consumed in living
nothing is beautiful about bones
we put them out of sight, and
eat take-out pizza in front of the television

Anstey -
Definitely can relate to the feeling of this right now. Also, I LOVE the word rubbish.

ShannonV -

Do you write fictional prose? something about this made me think you could write a killer short story. maybe cuz this seemed like the begining of a short story to me.. the combination of the details (the milk, bills etc) and the bigger picture, so to speak.. the bone comment.. very interesting. this reminds me of the numerous ways that we (meaning everyone) distract ourselves from what we should be doing/thinking about.

also i just re-read it and noticed that i read it as "nothing is beautiful but bones" which is really completley different than about which is what you wrote. but i like yours better. only suggestion: change the last word of the last line from "ate" to "eat".. i think grammatically it would work better. though i guess that depends on whether you meant the "put" as present tense or past tense, its kind of hard to tell due to well.. the way the english language works.

Tracey -

Vivid slice of real life and I dig it, I like my life being understood and articulately displayed by another writer.

Only thing I might change is "ate" to "eat," as I think it's the only past tense verb in the piece and it takes me out of the flow. Also, I think "take out" needs a hyphen, take-out.

I, too, appreciate the sound of the word, "rubbish." Seems rather British or Aussie. I really dig accents.

ShannonV -

Only thing I might change is "ate" to "eat,"

copycat!!

Tracey -

While standing on line at the grocery store and looking through a magazine, I discovered that there is a magazine out there with the name..."rubbish." It's about reusing and recycling.

Norm -
what an excellent, little poem. nothing is wasted; every word counts.

Callooh -

ShannonV:

I blog (although infrequently now), and have never had the disipline to flush out a story. I always start longer and cut things out instead of adding detail (quite lazy really)

grammer hates me... I wasn't sure which to put, thanx! (the english language likes to taunt me as well)

Callooh -

Anstey:

rubbish is my life

Callooh -

Tracey:

you know I wrote it only for you.....

sometimes even Canucks have rubbish too

Callooh -

ShannonV:

great minds think alike...

or as my father would say (mostly about me) -- fools seldom differ...