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Do you write fictional prose? something about this made me think you could write a killer short story. maybe cuz this seemed like the begining of a short story to me.. the combination of the details (the milk, bills etc) and the bigger picture, so to speak.. the bone comment.. very interesting. this reminds me of the numerous ways that we (meaning everyone) distract ourselves from what we should be doing/thinking about. also i just re-read it and noticed that i read it as "nothing is beautiful but bones" which is really completley different than about which is what you wrote. but i like yours better. only suggestion: change the last word of the last line from "ate" to "eat".. i think grammatically it would work better. though i guess that depends on whether you meant the "put" as present tense or past tense, its kind of hard to tell due to well.. the way the english language works.
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