North borne - Shakespeare's Monkeys

north borne

(hitch hiking to Alaska in 1966)
north borne

if we had been
dream-tied on the way
to Alaska,

you and I
there
in the middle
of North America

wind washed through
Canada

across the end
of time that wouldn't
come again

lying at night
on the tundra
like reindeer lost
to the sea

if we had been
dream-tied under the aurora,
electric faces
shimmering against sleep

what perfect hands
we would have
whispered into the holiness

U668857 -
I like the haunting imagery contained in this piece. It cumulates towards a vision of vast elementalism immersing the human microcosm. I'm not wholly sure of the repeating motif of the "dream tie" - it suggests a connection in dreams which never quite connected? Stanzas 2-5 work particularly well for me, but it's an evocative piece on the whole....BRgds.,Alan.

Emeya -

Alaska.

Land of the Midnight Sun. I was born in Ketchikan. A couple of years ago I spent the winter in a cabin (realizing everybody is going to warmer places to pass winter). It's beautiful. The quality of air...

can't imagine hitchhiking there though. It seems like it would take awhile to get anywhere. Then again, what's the rush.

I really like the phrase "dream tied." I sensed a sort of whimsy and desolation both throughout the write and then the ending stanza brings it all together nicely. My only suggestion is small and barely relevant, but: Maybe consider putting a hyphen so that it's "dream-tied" --I told you it was small.

-Emeya

Norm -
Emeya, the hyphenated word is perfect! I'm changing it right now. Thank you.