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May 16, 2025  

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Endless Skies

Madrigal....inspired by Leanne....I'm sure it's not correct but I gave it a try
 

Adrift in a sea of endless skies
The sun and the moon each take a turn
Playing the game of hide and go seek

As the sun slides west beneath the Earth
The moon fills the sky with twinkling lights
Adrift in a sea of endless skies
The sun and the moon each take a turn

As the sun seeks the moon, the moon hides
And the moon lets the sun catch a glimpse
Before it fades into another day
Adrift in a sea of endless skies
The sun and the moon each take a turn
Playing the game of hide and go seek

1- Leanne on Mar. 29 2008

It's not technically correct because you're not rhyming, but it actually took me a minute to notice that -- also it's not iambic but your meter is fairly consistent and I like it, it's quite upbeat and pleasant (technically, mostly DUM-da-da dactyls).  I think what this actually proves is that it's not the rhyme scheme that makes these things work, but the refrain and having it (them) fit neatly into the puzzle.  So, I can't give you top marks for following patterns but I do like this an awful lot and I think it's inaccurate but true in spirit.
Jennifer Ragan

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on Mar. 29 2008
from Camillus, New York

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