
A couple of thoughts:
- Would death be more interesting and powerful if given a gender? (it seems such a weak word to me)
- Would it be GrapeS of modern wrath?
- in L3 i feel like i'm missing something, I can't quite understand the parens seperately around each word, rather than (come quick!) which would be consistent with L7
- I'm not completely sold on the layout, but it's definitely an interesting piece. I enjoyed it.

Thanks a lot for your thoughts -
The layout looked so much better on paper, and the parentheses weren't really doing it for me.
I rather prefer the anonymity of "it" though, rather than "he."
~Annie