I saw death

A couple of thoughts:

• Would death be more interesting and powerful if given a gender? (it seems such a weak word to me)
  
•  Would it be GrapeS of modern wrath?
• in L3 i feel like i'm missing something, I can't quite understand the parens seperately around each word, rather than (come quick!) which would be consistent with L7
• I'm not completely sold on the layout, but it's definitely an interesting piece. I enjoyed it.