
An intruiging piece, full of some fantastic images and thoughts.
I must admit, one part I struggled with in regards to the poem is:
"to save myself
the dirty decent
to comfort her"
It caused me to "stagger" in my reading of the piece, the only real hiccup as I se it. I'm still trying to decide if you meant "the dirty descent" or not. That would actually work quite well with the conclusion to the piece. As "dirty decent", it also works, giving the reader a sense of the "unconvential" thought process. Personally though, I would suggest making it "descent" as it also infers a "descent into madness".
Great read all in all Callooh.
End.
Mos.

thanks for your thoughtful reading. going over it I agree, the word was extraneous, and the flow is better without it. I wasn't consciously thinking decent into hell (I was very tired and wanted to write it so I could sleep), but that is what it means.... thanks for that.
thanks again....