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May 16, 2025  

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Da Da

You will not remember
your almost sing-song entry:

a first toe-dip trial
in the sea-vast wash of words

that makes us what we are.
Outside, the Milky Way

absorbs the barking fox
where voices vaporize in breath;

but catching your little spring
I cup my love to hold;

with amplifying heart,
vibrate to hear your origins.

Anstey - on Jan. 16 2008
I like the images, particularly the opening one.
Ryan Wilbur - on Jan. 29 2008

Ah.  Da Da as opposed to dada? Tight, compact, and seems quite deliberate. I don't know what to say but I like it.  I think the brevity works extremely well and corresponds nicely to the cosmic aspect of the poem, esp when compared to the human life spanning the universe's life span.  Very short and beautiful. I'd return to this and rework the last line in some way...but I can't give you any suggestions, it just seems out of proportion with the rest of this gem.

 

 


U668857 - on Jan. 29 2008

Many thanks for comments/feedback.

Yes - that last line has morphed a bit - it's probably still not 100% there. Rgds., Alan. 

 
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