Rene' - I love the continuity of the two stanzas. The only thing about it is that in the next to last line, you lose it. If you used a color there (with restraint) it would keep the continuity going. Maybe, 'red restraints' or 'yellow bonds'. Otherwise, this is really interesting andvery intriguing.
----- fairy dust, that's all I'm saying.
I am orbiting, I don't know where, but I am orbiting something!
Mosquitobyte - Funny, I had thought of that when I posted it. These early Volumes are some old piece I'e been revamping.
"Restraint" is used in a dual way here, my restraint insofar as not being overt about the relationship I had with the lady concerned and also a tease at her love of restraints.
As I said, I'd thought a colour would work here but in the end, decided against it, as "a" colour would limit the possibilities of interpretation.
Thanks as always.
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