
Ouch.
On the first line, do you mean to have "I'm a funny guy"? Not that there's anything actually wrong with "I'm a funny", it just changes how I read it, since "funny" can actually be taken as being a cartoon -- an interpretation I quite like since it adds to the whole facade idea.
A+ for guffaw, there aren't enough of those in poetry these days

He he, 'twas an "intentional error", something to make the reader "trip" into the piece.

