Falling off the Edge

It would be easy
to leave you,
but windows are complicated
beasts.

Tear them open,
spilling
fall
from the edge;
upright and oval
panes
heat the air.

Skip a few words
or seconds off a minute;
move forward,
move forward.

Looking inside?
Still harder
than looking back.
Try again....

Alcuin of York -
Goodness gal! This one I had to reread several times. That's because I always regarded looking back as more difficult than looking in. Finally I realized your meaning. Nicely done! And the difficulty in my understanding might be because a) I'm slow; or b) slow on Sundays only; or c) because this is very intriguing - which makes it more interesting.

I also like your choice of italic font. It fits the run-on thought processes. I can suggest no improvements.

Very nice.

Alcuin

Anstey -
I need to see if it makes more sense when i'm not so tired. It is, immediately, outside my ability to undersatnd.
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stephan

Kat -
Thank you, gentlemen......btw, if it made sense on first read, then I would be disappointed.......I was trying to be creatively obtuse......alcuin, glad you saw the meaning with the "looking inside/looking back".......wasn't sure if anyone would......Kat

Anstey -
Kat, Papa Smurf is about the most perceptive reader you could ever dream of having. The Dude is BLUE!!!!
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stephan