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Ode to my Lawnmower

a Shakespearean sonnet

I needed escape from the constant noise,

the playstation’s rev invaded my mind.

The screaming, whining had taken my poise,

my secret weapon would let me unwind.

Out in the yard, among all the flowers,

the green grass waving, stretching to the sky,

here exerting my ultimate power,

the smell of chlorophyll made me feel high.

The lawnmowers tank is now full of gas,

I climb on the seat and start on my trek,

the small motor hums, prepared for the task,

the last step now is lower the deck.

            The whir of the blades turning round and round,

            spitting the green grass out onto the ground.

 

Leanne - on Jan. 6 2008

Do you know, I absolutely love mowing the lawn?  I do it barefoot, which is apparently quite a bad thing, but I love the feel of the new cut grass underfoot. 

Now... iamb-wise you're running into some difficulty.   Scanning just the first two lines I come up with:

I NEED/ed esCAPE /from the CON/stant NOISE,
the PLAY/station's REV/ inVAD/ed my MIND.

obviously it depends where you put the foot breaks, but that's more or less:

iamb/ anapaest/ anapaest/ iamb
iamb/ anapaest/ iamb/ anapaest

if you tried to make it all iambic when you said it aloud, the stresses are all over the shop.  I'm actually going to make a rather radical suggestion here and Shakespearean purists would flay me, but I really like the rhythm created in the first couple of lines (though I'd stick with the iamb/ anaepaest/ anapaest/ iamb order), which is kind of galloping and up-beat and I'd love to see what would happen if you tried to keep that.  Triple feet are so much more exciting, and there is some action going on here... and bugger the purists.

 


Rene' - on Jan. 6 2008

Okee dokee, I will see what I can do with that! Mowing is my escape during the summer, I hate being stuck in the house during the wet, cold winter months. Thank God that winters are short in southeast Texas!! I miss my mower:( 

----- just wandering the maze of hallways in my bent mind!




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