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May 17, 2025  

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french silk

It's very high school. But I guess that's what I like about it.

I think it would feel poetic
if I left
to buy a French Silk pie

Brought it home to eat
alone
with Jack and Sally

But it wouldn't help
at all
with what I need to heal

And it wouldn't taste
the same
with my own fork

It'd turn to nothing in my
salty mouth
and I'd be disappointed.

Anstey - on Aug. 25 2007

I really like this. It's funny, i stopped on the 'but' for quite a while and pondered if you could cut it, or if you could change it to though, set it off by itself, etc etc. I'm not sure any of that would be at all helpful. In the end, I think it's pretty good as it stands.

The first stanza is brilliant.


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  • stephan

Desde debajo - on Aug. 25 2007
The first stanza was really the one that gave me the most trouble, so I'm glad you like what I ended up using. That and the last one, too.
Thanks!
Rene' - on Jan. 7 2008

While the first stanza is outstanding in and of itself, I find the last two stanzas to be absolutely amazing! Especially the last one, great turn! 

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