 Stephan Ansteyfrom Lowell, MA Associate, 6232 posts |
Definitely it's a poem. Whether it's the poem you want it to be, only you can tell. -----
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 Julie herselffrom Here and There 302 posts |
Does that mean it sucks? I'm clearly in an experimental phase right now, but don't have much of a radar yet. If it doesn't work, I can take it. Just gives me more to work on. I think it sounds better this way, though too many words at the end? By Daedelous' dream and Leonardo's prayer it's only absurdity of faith Keeping 400 tons of steel in the air |
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Flight
This is the last of my inspirations from Texas, which came while I was praying for my life during a fairly turbulent flight -- I'm a terrible flyer. Anyway, I stripped all the extra words out, and came up with this, and now I'm not sure if it's a nothing, a poem, if it should be worked into a broader piece. I think it wants to be short, because it's those kinds of staccatto thoughts I have when I'm terrified!
Daedelous’ dream
Leonardo’s prayer
absurdity of faith
400 tons in the air
- Julie herself
on June 21 2007
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