2- Limeymcfrog
on June 12 2007
Anstey:
They aren't frail tempests, but rather tempests caused by frailty, tempests of frailty, or frailty tempests. That's my intention, at least. If it doesn't scan, then it doesn't scan, and that might be the case.
They aren't frail tempests, but rather tempests caused by frailty, tempests of frailty, or frailty tempests. That's my intention, at least. If it doesn't scan, then it doesn't scan, and that might be the case.
1- Anstey
on June 12 2007
the line "My frailty tempests" doesn't work too well I think, due to the fact it should be 'frail tempests' -- frailty is a noun, not an adjective.
I also wonder about the verb, "felt" in L3. wouldn't it be 'knew' or 'understood' - it's not an empathy as much as an epiphany it would seem to me. Therefor you want to show understanding of Job. more than a connection to Job.
All in all, i love the idea of this, simply because I find it so relatable -- having, believe it or not, been a young man once.
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