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Sonnet of the Young Man

Sonnet of the Young Man

The day I learned that I could turn the globe
At any speed, toward any goal I chose
Is when I felt the suffering of Job,
And gave my soul ill-fitted, humble clothes.
So terrified was I to merely think
Of using forces now in my employ;
Unsure if lust would tip me o’er the brink,
And cause my honest wishes to destroy.
Thus years elapsed ere I could quell the fear
Of consequence that robbed me of my skill.
My frailty tempests never so severe
That conscience breezes could not calm at will.

I trust the inner battle of my soul
So I may claim my measure of control.

1- Anstey on June 12 2007

the line "My frailty tempests" doesn't work too well I think, due to the fact it should be 'frail tempests' -- frailty is a noun, not an adjective.

I also wonder about the verb, "felt" in L3. wouldn't it be 'knew' or 'understood' - it's not an empathy as much as an epiphany it would seem to me. Therefor you want to show understanding of Job. more than a connection to Job. 

All in all, i love the idea of this, simply because I find it so relatable -- having, believe it or not, been a young man once. 

 

 


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  • stephan
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on June 11 2007

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