Body detail - Shakespeare's Monkeys

body detail

(once, in the A Shau Valley at night, out in the jungle looking for the wounded and bodies, I heard my full name spoken as clearly as could be. I still get goose flesh when I think of it.)

body detail

snipers made us shadow men.
red-lensed lamps
ghosting around the jungle,
looking for leftovers.

we stuffed nineteen
year old jigsaw puzzles
into black bags.
all fittings done
somewhere in drawing rooms.

once,
as the night darkened away,
I thought I heard
my name,

but I wasn't listening.

Alcuin of York -
For now you are a one-instrument orchestra. You play the sound of the Vietnam Vet. Totally understandable. Also, you play it well. Play it for as long as you need to, brother, but I hope in time you'll gradually take up other writing themes as well. I'd like to see you expand both your writing and your hearts-expression.
If this were crap, I might not tell you it's crap in exactly that terminology, but I definitely wouldn't praise it. So I am absoultely straight when I say this is really good. The "jigsaw puzzle" line is terse and effective - wonderful metaphor and imagery. Makes me a bit jealous. The only part that I disliked was "red-lensed lamps". The tongue just doesn't go from the "d" to the "l". I suggest something like "red lamp lenses" or if that is objectionable to you, just removing the "-ed".
Also, it should be "nineteen-year-old". You've got the 1st part at the end of a line, so the 1st dash might need to be eliminated to prevent incorrect phrasing for the reader.
I don't know if it fits your meaning appropriately, but you might consider for the last line, "but I wouldn't listen".
Alcuin