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Shakespeare's Monkeys

Infinite Monkeys. Infinite Typewriters.

More in ergo sum hominus

15. sudo

i sweat
painted pine
floating on cool water.

sunlight

red skin.

hazel eyes (closed)

a naked boy

tender summer afternoon

no lemonade
no fish
no future
no past

heat

armpits
stomach

chest

hair

a wave
a dive

release
relief

reality.

Alcuin of York - on May 18 2007
I assume the red / white / blue refer to something within the experience. Because we readers cannot relate to it, It adds nothing to the poem for us. I suggest that adding a few words to make it relevant would strengthen the write. The minimalism of the rest of this make it interesting, so the fewer words to give us a reference point, the better.
Alcuin
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