Super hero in the Making

In the backseat
Bright sun streams down
Makes his cheeks glow
As he tells me

When he grows up
He’s gonna be Spiderman
And Batman
And Buzz Light-year
And a teenage Mutant Ninja turtle

The funny thing is
When I look
Through the rear view mirror
Into his large chocolate eyes
And see his grin
I believe him

1- Derma Kaput on May 9 2007

I think what I like best about this poem is in the third stanza, where the child's brown eyes and smile are framed in the rearview mirror. It made me smile when I read it. Very nice Shannon.

2- Jen on May 10 2007

I love the title and what you wrote too.

My only suggestion is that you used the word "bright" twice in the first stanza and close together.

"Bright sun streams down
Makes his cheeks bright"

Maybe:

Bright sun streams down
Makes his cheeks glow

3- Anstey on May 10 2007

this is a lot of fun Shannon.

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stephan

4- Shannon McEwen on May 10 2007

Jen:

Great suggestion Jen, I didnt realize I'd used the word twice (I hate when I do that!)
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Life is what happens while you wait for great things.

Life is what happens while you wait for great things.

5- Somday In May on May 11 2007

This was a really nice read first thing in the morning, after doing battle with my own children to get them on the bus that always seems to run late on the bad days. It made me remember to stop and breath. And then to smile.

Very nicely written, and quite endearing.

~Mandi

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...but what do I know?

6- White_Feather on May 13 2007

Oh, so sweet!!! Absolutely love it. There's nothing like Mother love, and how wonderful it is to see it framed in poetry.