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I love the title and what you wrote too.
My only suggestion is that you used the word "bright" twice in the first stanza and close together.
"Bright sun streams down
Makes his cheeks bright"
Maybe:
Bright sun streams down
Makes his cheeks glow
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- » Shannon McEwen on May 10 2007 - Jen: Great suggestion Jen, I didnt realize I'd used the word ...
by Jen on May 10 2007