Our average little marriage - Shakespeare's Monkeys

our average little marriage

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let me find your love
in your broken eyes
the way we fold
and then unwind into
a mesh -- a screen
we grow old then
it seems we know
where the sands of time
fall right through
and the gems are left
bits of laughter and bits of truth
cracked and worn
we were born, then it grew
a swim on a dolphin's fluke
an average thing between
me and you
let me find your dreams
in my broken heart
like a mussel shell
learning how when we're apart
I feel like hell
then the way we die
a starfish arm falls
off -- we're apart
and then wouldn't
you know we start to
live again -- a testament
to family pride and sea glass
on an endless beach
in your eyes so deep and green
let me find your soul
in our babies love
a long road trip
to far above where
the mountains show
the snows and then
we go back down to the sea
again....let me find
your love
in your broken eyes
let me find your dreams
then let's try to build one soul
for when we die
let me find your life
in the salty tears in my eyes
let me find your life
on a seabreeze sigh
let me find your life
in my eyes

let me find your love
let me find your love

Rene -
Okay, here goes! The meaning, to me, is one of sentimentality and is quite sweet really. I find the piece a little hard to read though. For instance, I would suggest ;

let me find love
in your broken eyes
the way we fold
then unwind
into a mesh -- a screen

we grow old then
it seems we know
where the sands of time
fall right through
the gems are left
bits of laughter, bits of truth
cracked and worn
we were born, then it grew
a swim on a dolphin's fluke
an average thing between
me and you

By taking out a few articles here and there, then adding a few line breaks it lets MY mind absorb the thoughts more easily. It seems to run together too quickly for the actual metaphors and visuals to come easily to the brain!
Just a few thoughts here is all...I do love the overall effect though.

I am orbiting, I don't know where, but I am orbiting something!

Anstey -

the tripping is on purpose...

Hopefully, they emphasise certain moments in the piece -- places where you end up having to pause a thought, and rethink it, possibly from a different angle. I am hoping at times there's almost a stutter about it, a lyric little dance and certainly -- it should be slightly difficult to read. (easier I think when spoken)

stephan