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night sweats

                (just another Agent Orange adventure)

night sweats

dioxin derails
the central nervous system,
drifts homeless through the body
for decades.

an alphabet of symptoms,
conditions, diagnoses,
debilitations, diseases-
even death,

and night sweats.

    (bisect the body
    from widow’s peak
    to pubic bone,
    snap a chalk line
    or straight-edge
    a marker.

    for days, sometimes
    weeks
    half the body remembers
    hills and jungle,
    ambushes and incoming.
    the taste of fear,

    pours sweat enough
    to soak sheets and sleep,
    confound specialists,
    and confer temporary celebrity
    on the unwilling.)

Tracey - on Mar. 31 2008

I couldn't click on this one fast enough because I anticipate night sweats in my immediate future. Then, I realized the nature of the piece...

Another well wrought, first row seat to the ongoing horrors of war. The "halving" of the piece, first the general description then the specific, works really well on so many levels.


Josie - on Apr. 1 2008
Wow!  An incredible poem.  "Bisect from widow's peak" is superb.  "Half the body remembers" - wonderful imagery.  My only suggestion is to give it a stronger beginning.  The middle images and the end are so strong.  Maybe something better than "an alphabet of symptoms".  This is more general than the later, more specific language.  Terrific work.
Norm - on Apr. 1 2008

Thanks for the comments and suggestions.

My wife, an RN since 1970, said my night sweats pattern is something she never saw in her career. It is, apparently, not unknown in VA hospitals among Vietnam veterans.


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