on the topic of love

it used to be that I would
think of flowers and
sunshine:
you know how
poet types are.

and you would sit in your
corner and I in mine
and eventually we'd meet
half-way,
kissing clumsily and groping
with quiet reservation.

sometimes I could smell
a faint earthiness
on your skin as you
climaxed.

afterward I always wondered
what it was like for you

but I'm just
a woman.

Anstey -

Jazz, I think the linebreaks are a bit overmuch. I love several stretches of this except for the breaks. the first stanza is wonderful, though I think 'we poets' or just 'you know how poets are'

Also, I don't like the 'and' to start S4. I liked the ands through S2, the sort of hypnotic list worked well, but in S4 it just feels extraneous.

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