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The Visit

You're on a flying visit;

I take your case - a magic box;

inside is Argyle Street:

the cobbles and coal lorries,

the pigs and midden out back

and mad-dogs muzzling under doors;

the front room still fridge-cold;

a high and raftered attic still hiding us

from the women-full house.

 

Unpack your suitcase

full of socks and ghosts;

there, under that shirt:

the yard's whitewashed walls

and Sissy's geranium pots

and pantry bowls of semolina;

 

the outdoor privy and outsized coals,

and further back still:

our girl-mothers calling at doors

in search of "brock" for the pigs.

 

We shake hands as if

to firm up the here and now.

This is my family, my house,

my baby mother, my father me.

Alcuin of York - on Dec. 5 2007

Well Alan, like most your writes, this one requires rereading to wring out the full meaning, of which there is a large quantity. That makes it interesting.

I understand Pandora's box, but it held evil, and I don't believe you intended that implication. It's modern meaning is equivalent to "a can of worms". Perhaps a ‘treasure chest' would be more apropos?

I also wonder that you avoided the obvious "female-full-house" instead of "women-full". Perhaps the alliteration was a bit too obvious.

I do like the last stanza. In fact, this whole piece seems to get better and better as it proceeds.

Alcuin


U668857 - on Dec. 5 2007
Many thanks, Alcuin. I should have realised Pandoras box had negative connotations - which is the complete opposite of what's intended here. I've replaced it with a "magic box" ... Much obliged, Rgds.,Alan.
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