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Shakespeare's Monkeys

Infinite Monkeys. Infinite Typewriters.

More in Words, paradoxes, metaphors...you name it they all come alive in poetry or prose.

COLLAPSE

Inhale, exhale...

Inhale, exhale, inhale

She sucks in oxygen to feed the muscles that move the arms that prompt the fingers to beat out a rhythm that exorcises the demons through typing the letters that form the words that cause her pain:

bitch slut whore mother fucker cunt lying bitch

all spewing from the lips that she once kissed with such tenderness as one would caress a baby's face and looked at with such grace as one would a perfectly formed rose and desired with such strength as one would have to save another that they love.

exhale, inhale, exhale

She begs her mind to perform intricate operations with the letters of these words to make it all make some sort of sense to her tattered thought processes because he has mirrored his anger onto her in an attempt to make sense of his own evil actions that he knows have caused her such intense pain as to make her want to disappear from the face of the earth and never be seen again but he knows her responsibility keeps her here.

inhale, exhale, inhale

exhale, inhale, exhale

collapse

 

 

Alcuin of York - on Nov. 30 2007

Very imaginative, Rene. One suggestion I have is to put the phrase, "all spewing from the lips" on its own separate line. Its message is disconsonant with the rest of the para.

Please note the misspelling of 'rhythm' in the 1st long para. You might also toy with the idea of interchanging the 'that exorcise(s) the demons' with 'typing the letters'. A couple of propositions might need changing also to accommodate the change, but I think it would work better.

This is not only imaginative, but I also like the way it reproduces the described emotional state through the sounding-out of the writing.

Alcuin


Rene - on Dec. 1 2007
  Thank you so very much. I did notice the typo after you pointed it out and then I found a couple of more!


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