Shame - Shakespeare's Monkeys

shame

Shame wears sharpened metal gloves
to crush your throat
and steal your voice
while he whispers
"slut"
into your ear

he sits upon you, curving
his horned nails into your chest
and smiles with greenish lips

his teeth are jagged
black iron, and grate together
while he laughs

you will always be
his favourite marionette
to laugh and whisper to, as
you dance just for him

I admire your foray into this realm of emotion, because I deal with it and I don't have a clue as to how to express it (yet). Shame is as hard to exorcise from the body as stink on shite, and it is a profoundly controlling force.

When I read this another approach occurs to me as well -- you describe the harshness and tenacity of shame vividly, AND, I find it always disguises itself so cleverly that it takes me awhile to see that's the button that's been pushed. Maybe a write incorporating this idea, too?

Or maybe not, because when shame takes control it is, quite simply as you have written, cruel.

Kat -

Absolutely great writing, ruthie......[I know this isn't a review, but wanted to let you know how well-written I think this poem is--both raw and intense]

Rene -
I think this is wonderfully put together! You brought out the emotion extremely well with your fantastic word choices. It brought to mind a book that I read last year called "The Toothfairy" and this fairy was no nice little pink fairy...no, it was much like this emotion you have described here. Well done and I have absolutely no critiques for you!!
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I am orbiting, I don't know where, but I am orbiting something!

Callooh -

Tracey:

another emotional eviseration - right then! I have to work up to this kind of anquish ... could take me months (although hanging with teenage childrens does have some benefit....)

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Callooh -

Kat:

definately a review - superier to most that I write. thanks Kathy! (sorry for the time warp in replying )

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Callooh -

Rene:

I always doubted the mental accuity of a tight wearing, stelth tooth-collecting faery.... doubtful movitives there to be sure.... thx!!

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