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Leaves

thanks for the title Alcuin!!!

If I am the oak

who are all the leaves

that hang on my limbs, feeding

off the nourishment

that I leech from the ground

with my stable, massive

roots?

 

Are they not memories

of all that I have seen

throughout my years of my life?

Do they not fall

in the cold of winter

only to decompose,

slithering back into the earth

that feeds my new memories?

 

Do they not regrow themselves

each spring

mixed amongst the new

                               thoughts

                                          desires

                                                  dreams

planting renewed visions

to grow in my mind?

 

Do I not

turn a small piece of each one

of my selfsame memories loose

               to blow

                      into

                          tomorrow

each time that the gentle breeze

stirs through

my leaves?

 

Thus do I find myself blowing free

around this earth

on a new adventure each

year

      day

           hour

                  minute

                             forever.

Comments

Alcuin of York - on Sep. 12 2007

I love the theme and the ideas expressed. They form a wonderful image. I think some of the expression is a bit wordy: "leech out of" instead of "leech from"; "all that has passed before my eyes / throughout the years of my life" instead of "I've seen throughout my years"; "each spring of my life" instead of "each spring". In short, great idea, great images, and I think the order of exposition is good. It just needs some paring down.

Also, you might consider "Leaves" for a title, though the current title works.

Alcuin


Rene - on Sep. 12 2007
Thank you so much my friend! This is the first write (there have been no changes at all, straight from the heart and the pen, first draft). I have not had time yet to go back and do a rewrite as I have had so much homework to do. I will get back to it soon and will be around to read for you soon as well. I always appreciate and look forward to you comments and suggestions! I find them uplifting and helpful.
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Rene'


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Laurie - on Sep. 12 2007

Hi Rene! I have missed reading your poems! I really like this one and can identify with the sentiments. I look forward to more!

 


Rene - on Sep. 12 2007
Thank you Laurie, so nice to see you! I am not on as much since school had started again and I am taking 16 hours this semester (what was I thinking??).
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Rene'


I am orbiting, I don't know where, but I am orbiting something!
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