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04. the death of may

Brent - on Aug. 21 2008

I don't feel like the repeated phrase that closes the poem is strong enough to be the close, and it's not strong enough to stand the repetition.  Some details like the smell of fish on the hands are strong, but the poem as a whole doesn't measure up.

Brent

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