
Well, Alan, "Topiary" shouldn't work as a sonnet in my super anal head, but in some bizarre way it turned out rather remarkable. Why? I think it's the incredibly powerful summation -- technically only a very soft volte, but it still closes the poem strongly.
I like Caravaggio -- I think I have this thing about seriously flawed artists. Or maybe, seriously human artists and their amazing capacity to create things which transcend their own humanity. That all these things -- the sum of the artist and his object -- are poured into a single, technically static piece of art -- it sometimes defies description. Maybe that's why we're so obsessed with trying to describe it.

Many thanks, Leanne
Yeah - I wondered about the conversion of the original "Topiary" poem. I think it helped that the original stanzas where 7 lines a piece...so cobble two togther and see what happens...it has changed a bit though...
That Carravagio painting is something else (as is all his art!). I thought it would be a great spring board for a poem about agnosticism ...
I've entered these 3 in an open poetry sonnet competition...no doubt (as per usual) they'll by-pass the judges with infuriating ease!!...still we live in hope among the little lotteries of life....Cheers, Alan.

Profit and Loss: A nostalgic look back at childhood land that feels both rueful and accepting. I relate to and enjoy this. I read the pauses in the last line a bit differently:
and like the swallow, people, too, migrate
I completely buy the theme and imagery of Topiary, but I feel tripped up in its meter. Is it me? God knows I'm not an expert (but I'm learning!).
The Incredulity of Saint Thomas: I sort of float along with the first five lines; lines 6 on knock me out -- the expectations and realities of belief/faith brilliantly exposed.

Many thanks, Tracey
You certainly grasp theme and meaning in these pieces - which is v satisfying.
Yes, that last line in Profit and Loss has morphed several times! It's full of
pauses and parenthesis which are open to grammatical interpretation....And you're
quite right about the lapse of iambic rhythm in "Topiary".
I seldom adhere slavishly to the traditional sonnet rules
(much to the chagrin of purists!). Indeed, the "Carravagio" poem has a climactic
ending of sorts...it's a v emotive subject afterall...
BRgds.,Alan.