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3 Sonnets

 

Profit and Loss

They made a golf course where the barley grew:
golden fields of grain no longer paid;
the surplus market's subsidies withdrew,
so fairways carve to greens where barley swayed.
And now the houses top the hills: their roofs
triangulate the sky where barley stood,
where bolting hares surprised my cut and swathe;
where long ago, I watched you climb and wave.
The land I knew is never-never land,
where golden boys go gladly hand-in-hand.
The commerce I embrace was always there
in undulating fields that hid the hare.
Economies must house the working state
and, like the swallow, people too migrate.

 

Topiary

Today at work, they put out the topiary.
Last week the concrete blocks were placed:
a hulking semi-circle of stone security
to make a no-go plaza . It's only
now a vital sense of change impacts:
this leafy line of clipped container plants
inducing double-takes, a heightened scrutiny.
They gesture business-as-usual: flying planes
from A to B, commercialising skies.
But mostly, fronting with fragile art the random
stroke of chaos: the sculptor's forms and shapes
deny the senseless blast of flaming car bomb;
co-opted, they tremble to counter suicides
as Dresden china or Nero's violin.

 

The Incredulity of Saint Thomas

Caravaggio, didn't you kill someone
in a brawl once? I also read you swaggered,
cocksure - cocksure; and from
the way he prods and probes the open severed
flesh, bloodless, undeniably cut,
your arrogant Thomas still seems to stipulate
the terms of belief. Unbelieving what
his eyes behold; bound by touch and sensate
apprehension. Knowing what he'd know:
the room should shake, the breaking heart explode
beyond the paint, a kind of madness grow
and grip him comprehending what he owed.
The measure of his crying heart's relief
as loud as life and equal to my disbelief.

Comments

Leanne - on Aug. 23 2007

Well, Alan, "Topiary" shouldn't work as a sonnet in my super anal head, but in some bizarre way it turned out rather remarkable.  Why?  I think it's the incredibly powerful summation -- technically only a very soft volte, but it still closes the poem strongly.

I like Caravaggio -- I think I have this thing about seriously flawed artists.  Or maybe, seriously human artists and their amazing capacity to create things which transcend their own humanity.  That all these things -- the sum of the artist and his object -- are poured into a single, technically static piece of art -- it sometimes defies description.  Maybe that's why we're so obsessed with trying to describe it. 


U668857 - on Aug. 23 2007

Many thanks, Leanne

Yeah - I wondered about the conversion of the original "Topiary" poem. I think it helped that the original stanzas where 7 lines a piece...so cobble two togther and see what happens...it has changed a bit though...

That Carravagio painting is something else (as is all his art!). I thought it would be a great spring board for a poem about agnosticism ...

I've entered these 3 in an open poetry sonnet competition...no doubt (as per usual) they'll by-pass the judges with infuriating ease!!...still we live in hope among the little lotteries of life....Cheers, Alan. 

 

 

 


Tracey - on Aug. 23 2007

Profit and Loss: A nostalgic look back at childhood land that feels both rueful and accepting. I relate to and enjoy this. I read the pauses in the last line a bit differently:

and like the swallow, people, too, migrate

 

I completely buy the theme and imagery of Topiary, but I feel tripped up in its meter. Is it me? God knows I'm not an expert (but I'm learning!).

The Incredulity of Saint Thomas: I sort of float along with the first five lines; lines 6 on knock me out -- the expectations and realities of belief/faith brilliantly exposed. 

 


U668857 - on Aug. 23 2007
Many thanks, Tracey

You certainly grasp theme and meaning in these pieces - which is v satisfying.
Yes, that last line in Profit and Loss has morphed several times! It's full of
pauses and parenthesis which are open to grammatical interpretation....And you're
quite right about the lapse of iambic rhythm in "Topiary".
I seldom adhere slavishly to the traditional sonnet rules
(much to the chagrin of purists!). Indeed, the "Carravagio" poem has a climactic
ending of sorts...it's a v emotive subject afterall...

BRgds.,Alan.

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