Kiss a Memory (Revised)

This is a revision of an older poem. I like the original, but I thought this might lend itself to a song lyric. I am not sure if the revisons enhance or detract from the original

Kiss a memory from long ago
Taste the lips young as before
Replay the time of a Jubilee
Wanton with drink and 70's play

Kiss a memory and think
Of the troubled girl
A woman and a child
Flush with life and lack of guile
Once again that momentary appeal

Kiss a memory and smile
For Childhood friends
Playing games
Spinning yarns
Laughing at shame

Kiss a memory and see the girl
Fading into an insane whirl
High as the highest peak
No drugs to speak

Kiss a memory and feel
The schizophrenic loss of reality
Reverting to childhood dreams
Swinging and playing in old retreats

Kiss a memory and remember the pain
When the attacker comes to play
Leaving her lifeless and at rest
Amid the child hood toys of her past

See her troubled eyes again
Wish the wish of normalcy
While wallowing in uncertainty
Kiss a memory

1- Alcuin of York on Aug. 21 2007

It's difficult for me to assess this as lyric. I have read the lyrics of songs I liked and found that as plain written poetry, most of them suck. The Dixie Chicks songs are an example. Absent the music, their lyrics don't read well. Add the music, and voila! The Beatle's could create lyrics that satisfied both the poet and the song-fan, but they are an exception.

As poetry, the original is clunky. S3, for instance has 3 lines of 3 beats, and a 4^th line with 4 beats. Yet set to music, it might sound great. I do wonder how the word, ‘schizophrenic' works to music.

Alcuin

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