Who - Shakespeare's Monkeys

Who

If I were you,
I wouldn't be me.
If you were me,
You wouldn't be you.
If you weren't you
And I wasn't me,
Who would be you
And who would be me?

1- Alcuin of York on Jul. 3 2007

Yes, it rhymes, but it's rather simplistic. For some guidance, I suggest you read "Jabberwocky" by Lewis Carroll. A child's poem should employ rhymes chosen from a writing level higher than the child's, but within his/her reach.

Alcuin

2- Jen on Jul. 4 2007

Thanks Alcuin,

I looked up "Jabberwocky" and here is the link if others want to read it too: http://www.jabberwocky.com/carroll/jabber/jabberwocky.html

I don't think my writing is comparable to like Lewis Carroll although I wish it was.

3- Alcuin of York on Jul. 4 2007

I doubt that Lewis Carroll's writing was as good as Lewis Carroll's writing - at least, not when he started. What I like about writing is that the possibilities for development are entirely unlimited.

Alcuin

4- Tracey on Jul. 6 2007

Ai-yi-yi it's not LC but it is interesting, and if it were part of a collection I think it would be a fun read for kids. I can envision myself reading this to my kids when they were younger.

5- Jen on Jul. 6 2007

Thanks Tracey,

It is one of fourty poems in a collection that I have been revising and updating. I'm posting them here to see what works and what doesn't. So far I've deleted 12 from my manuscript and added 3 new poems. I need to write more.

I like this poem because it is simple and it has a tongue-twisterness to it.