I Spy - Shakespeare's Monkeys

I Spy

I don't know about this one. It's kind of dumb...dumber than my usual dumb stuff

In the bluest summer sky
I spy with my little eye
A hungry hippo drifting by

A hungry hippo hovering high
Grazes greedily in the sky
There he goes, waving good-bye
Slowly fading, my, oh my

Lazily watching shapes drift by
Puffs of white clouds catch my eye
A pretty pony passes by

A pretty pony prancing high
Galloping through bluest sky
Watch him trotting, whisking by
Vanishing from my spying eye

In the deep blue summer sky
A sea of white clouds drifting by
With my eye, a shark I spy

A great white shark way up high
Slowly swimming, gliding by
Slicing through the deep blue sky
As I sit and wonder why

Stop and take the time to spy
Before the bluest summer sky
Turns to gray and passes by

Comments

1- Leanne on June 14 2007

You think this is dumb and I think this is among the least dumb stuff you've written, and you know I don't think your other stuff is dumb. Structurally it's really quite cool, with the alternating stanza lengths ("greedily grazing in the sky" is a bit long and awkward though). But what really gets me is the last stanza, which is very profound and definitely NOT dumb.

2- Someday In May on June 14 2007

I think this is great. In fact, I read it to my kids. They are 10, 8, and 5. They all enjoyed it as well. It has passed the kids test, that should tell you something.

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...but what do I know?

3- Jen on June 15 2007

Well, I know nothing and I just proved it.

Shannon, I'm glad your kids liked it. Please tell them I said, thank you.

Leanne, you like to eat your boogers for tea so I'm not so sure about you or this poem!

4- Leanne on June 15 2007

Boogers are full of protein.

Sure, it's generally protein that's made up of bacteria, but who cares?

5- White_Feather on June 15 2007

There's something else that's nice about this poem. It speaks to the innate wisdom of a child. and so much of children's literature really doesn't. I think it's lovely.

6- Leanne on June 15 2007

I SO agree with that... too many children's writers don't give kids enough credit... Jen always does and that's why I like her stuff so much.

7- Jen on June 15 2007

You guys are being too kind....If only you were children's book editors

8- Leanne on June 15 2007

Who says we won't be?

One day the world will be full of great poetry and Hallmark will lie dead and rotting on the ground... right next to almost all of Oprah's book club picks.