Bad Aim

Be brutal? So that's what you're into!
The minimalism of the start is canceled by the "and the silver wrappers". At least eliminate the "the".
Also, consider the possibility of putting the "and" on its own line. Just a thought.
Another item involves a decision: Does the can reflect the sun or the afternoon? If the latter, leave as is. If the former, then you would need to change it to something like "afternoon sun" or "noon sun", etc. It's your choice of what image you want to express.
Actually, this is rather nice - just needs a bit of polishing.
Alcuin

i would say remove both

just 'silver wrappers'

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• stephan