Freedom 2

Moving a hand away
from your own slashed throat
takes courage
looking down at stiff nipples
showing through
red soaked white
knowing pink
is long lost
is a struggle
between flesh and will
clot damn it

1- Derma Kaput on Apr. 3 2007

Of the two versions of Freedom, I think I like this one best because of the added detail. The second line, combined with the stiff nipples of the fourth, is downright shocking. I don't really know what to make of it.

2- Anstey on Apr. 3 2007

I agree with the Derma. the nipples add a vivid element, that is both grotesque and beautiful at once.

stephan

3- Rene on Apr. 4 2007

Wow, really vivid! I like this.

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