Butterscotch Moon

Butterscotch moon rising on the horizon

stuck between the mountain’s silhouette

and the underside of the clouds

Anstey -
I might consider 'rises' rather than 'rising' -- more active.

hmmm almost a haiku?

neato.

Butterscotch moon rises
between mountain silhouettes
and bellies of clouds

stephan

TriOak -

I wanted to keep the 'stuck' theme, to go along with the sticky butterscotch. But I like the idea of making it a haiku too. What about. . .

Butterscotch moon rise

between mountain's silhouette

and cloud's underside

Kath -

I like the "stuck" I'd rather you keep it.

I like the haiku idea.

butterscotch moonrise stuck

between mountain tops

and cloud bottoms

just an idea--you may like to keep silouttes, and you may want to keep undersides...

Rhiannon Jones -
I like it as haiku, too...and here's another possibility, incorporating some of the others...I'm not crazy about 'tween, but...

butterscotch moon rise
stuck 'tween mountain silhouette
and bellies of clouds

Rene -
I LOVE the theme and just to put my two cents worth in;

Butterscotch moon
rising above the horizon
stuck
between the mountain peaks
and the tender bellies
of soft clouds

I am orbiting, I don't know where, but I am orbiting something!

Kath -

butterscotch moon rise
stuck between mountains
and bellies of clouds

--I think the silhouette word distracts from the simplicity and drama of the view. This is a beautiful image--I think the simplicity suits it --- just need the butterscotch moon, mountains, cloud bellies... it seems to me...