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Shakespeare's Monkeys

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the whore on Merrimack Street.

her ass was obscenely round
and her waist almost unnaturally pinched
like an advertisement for cheap sin
but it wasn't her sordid body that I remember most
or the cruelness of her cackle

the black-haired bitch
with the latin trill and brown mustard eyes
told me right away,
"I don't have a soul."

I nodded three times, tilted
my head to the left
so my hair would catch the street light
and took a long drag.

"Sure thing, toots,"
with a thin billowing smile
and a cloud of almost-laughter
from my nose.

"Sure thing," I hissed my sigh
along side hers and we both looked
everywhere else but at eachother
until now was then
and it was time to move on.

later down in the bar
she was sitting on a fat chinese guy
and doing a shot of golden nectar
in hopes of drunken immortality
or free dope after a ten-second blow

I eyebrowed at her,
she winked and feigned strangerness.

I almost missed the halo
and tomorrows tears
but even I am not quite naive enough to think
she doesn't hurt.
White_Feather - on June 8 2007

What are your thoughts on the last two lines?  They feel a little abrupt to me . . . as if you could find a way to make the same point, but more in line with the rest of the poem . . . her eyes gazing out the window . . . or something . . . I don't know.  Then again, I think I've been out voted around here on my personal enjoyment of subtlety.


Anstey - on June 8 2007
Don't be so sure Julie! My sledge-hammer approach is not universally admired. There's a time for both, I think. I'll ponder that thought.
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