
I really like this one. The first two lines grabbed me, and you took a theme and subject that a lot of people have done and you made it different and you made it your own voice. I enjoyed this a lot.

I love this, Amanda. Your use of the pronoun 'I' as the last word in several lines is perfect. This is a gem of a poem.

As always, you leave me wondering how such an exact fusion of words can come about. Highly descriptive whilst maintaining the allusory aspects for which I've always envied you.
Excellent!
Mos.

...and the detached, yet intense sensuality of this is exceptional. I'm not sure how you managed that, but you did in spades.