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Like a Leaf
Like a leaf
tumbling
haphazardly
upon the mercy and whim
of something
that can’t be seen
or touched
I feel its breath
pushing me
forward
then changing directions
and pulling me
back
to where I started
to begin again
mixing words
and colors
into gold
before I’m bagged up
and thrown away
to decay
as compost
- Jennifer Ragan
Famous children's author....just nobody knows it yet
on Oct. 12 2009
from Camillus, New York
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1- Leanne Hanson
on Oct. 16 2009
We'd never have decent flowers without good compost
Rather than "upon the mercy and whim", it's more correct to say "at the mercy and whim". I'm not sure you need to say "something" that can't be seen or touched, it's unnecessary, what about "at the mercy and whim of that which can't be seen or touched"?