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Shakespeare's Monkeys

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May 16, 2025  

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...temperate zone...

hmmm...

...temperate zone...

I shattered a glass
in the kitchen sink
as my wife slept Friday night


narrow as the neck
of a slender bird
snatched from its lazy flight


what happened? she asked
have you cut yourself?
and she gathered the slivers of white


‘I’m fine, honey, really.
always am. then
I switched off a distant light

Sinnaminsun - on Jul. 8 2009

In my opinion you have a very natural, simplistic writing style that really hooks the reader.  I like your simile in the second stanza, though I might change-out "lazy" for some other descriptive.   I like the way you tell your story clearly and creatively with such few words.  


Suter Bill - on Jul. 9 2009

Thanks for stoppng by to comment. I thought everyone was on hiatus for the summer. As for "lazy," think of the word choice as something that intentionally interrupts the flow for the sake of hinting at danger. What that is I'll leave to the reader to determine.
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