Displaced

Welcome Misty! It's been a while since we've got to read each other work...or go on viking raids for that matter.

*rummages in your bottom draw looking for virgins*

Anyhow...to the poem.

The general thrust of the piece is apparent from the get go, and with that in mind, I don't have any issues. In fact, I kinda like it!.

The likening of antagonist and protagonist to anomolies only serves to show that we are indeed, all different.

One line strck me as badly written initiallly,
"I don't hardly ever find a place, "

Then I came to the final stanza,:

"And it seems,

I'm a discordant note,

In a melody

Of which I don't belong"

The first line did indeed kick me out of the 'melody" in which I was reading the piece. So, intended or not, that line ends up working when considered with the whole.

For many though, this "hiccup" in the rythm will cause a certain level of consternation. If it wasn't intended, I'd certainly clean it up.

Mos.