far from bulletproof

kat, your ideas have helped immensely. i'm going to edit that--i think you're absolutely right. i was struggling with the ending. it makes sense that it was because i already had it but didn't realize.

alcuin, i appreciate your words, and kat has done a remarkable job of explaining my line-breaks for me! basically i have "limit/-less" to portray both the limit of the nighttime (it will end, there is nothing to do but lie in this state, there are limits and constraints, but at the same time, it is also limitless in that black area of sleep/wake that seems neverending.) as far as the "sees" vs. "looks to," "looks to" doesn't really explain what i'm trying to say. i'm not suggesting that someone is staring up at the sky as they're falling, but rather seeing flashes of it through a window. i imagine that while falling in a plane your attention would jump from one thing to another: people inside the plane/silverware flying/things flipping upsidedown/the skewed view of the sky out the window, etc. it is those momentary skewed views that i liken to dreams, or at least my own dreams. also i think the sound of "sees the sky" vs. "looks to the sky" is stronger for the alliteration and smoothness. the k and t sounds in "looks to" chop up the statement in ways i don't really want it chopped.

i do appreciate the comments!