Fighting for Limbs

hey thanks for the help, i wasn't very confident in this one. i fixed a few things... i think i fixed them effectively, but i'm not sure. i left the "my"s because when i wrote it initially, they were the first step into the actual disassociation the poem was about and it was supposed to go along with how more is lost as the poem goes on. anyway, that's my reasoning for those. everything else i totally agreed with! let me know if you see anything else