Fighting for Limbs

Annie... I feel cold.  Not cold as in indifferent, cold as in frostbitten.  The overall detachment, or maybe enforced disassociation, is quite intense.  I like the out-of-body notion you've built with the parentheses -- I actually think you could replace the inverted commas "my" with parentheses also.  This will add just as much emphasis, I think, but may remove that confusion that Stephan mentions. 

In the fourth strophe you could probably lose the my.  In other words, I'd say just run it as:

Consciousness is loose to me,
a vague interpretation
of what's attached to
(almost) movement. 

You've already said me earlier on, you don't really need the extra my.

Also in the last line, I would suggest just sure instead of surely.  Surely sounds too stilted there, and a bit too proper, it's just not required even though it's grammatically correct.  We do bad things with grammar anyway, one more isn't going to hurt.  

I don't know if you've noticed, but the first strophe has a really solid rhythm which I won't suggest carrying through the whole poem (it's not required) BUT it would be a shame to lose it on the last line.  So, is there any way you can replace "things" with a two syllable word, something that accents the first syllable like "objects" only maybe not objects because that might not be the best word... 

But stop worrying, you don't need help THAT badly