Ginevra Requests the Honor of your Presence and Critique

Thank you!!!

Firstly, Yes! Your version is much funnier.  I didn't really know how to add levity to my point, so I hoped it would still work, since frankly, Ginerva doesn't look like she's much of a party girl anyway.

And just a nod to the fact that yes, many critiques of the painting do suggest she was cold.  The one thing I like about the poems together is that they tell a whole story.  I bet she was really hard to live with.

I'm frustrated about the meter issue.  I'm almost deaf to it.  I hear what you're saying (and what Leanne has written about rhythms previously) but I just don't HEAR it.  And I won't be able to fix the shortcomings until I 'get' it.  I'm still stuck on counting syllables, which I realise is wrong - it's the stresses.  I wonder if there's such thing as a poetry class that deals with pentameters and rhythms, because I might understand it better if I there was someone there tapping it out for me.

Lastly, as far as I'm concerned, please always feel free to "hammer" my work. For the most part, everyone knows how to do it tactfully, so it doesn't hurt my feelings, and I'm too green to have any kind of compass of my own.  it's really helpful to recieve feedback of what I'm doing well, and where I need to focus for improvement.

Thank you again for your time, and your thoughtful comments.