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*shudder* That gave me chills, but probably because we see eye to eye on this subject. I particularly like the " sacrifice satisfied" line, and actually it even seems like it may be a fitting final line w/o the initiation portion. I like your play on words for the title, as well. One change I personally would make is omitting the " the" in front of white coat... that way, white coat is an image more so than a person.. just as the other words throughout the poem you convey sensations rather than you saying " the tearing flesh". Am I making any sense?
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