Villanelle's Anyone?

Here's the only one I've ever written. Never got any feedback on it from another community I'm in, so I'd love anything...

On his pillow a bright penny will lay.
But understanding cannot be bought
When he’s gone so far away.

One of many in a teary cache
To purchase this absent thought;
On his pillow a bright penny will lay.

From fearful words I had to say
His heart and soul is much distraught
But understanding cannot be bought.

For his love, God’s love, I did betray.
The price for sin my heart is taught
On his pillow a bright penny will lay.

Tormented by demons I could not slay
Nor can I love God as I ought
When he’s gone so far away

With me, for my fears, he cannot pray
Because I’m snared and surely caught
On his pillow a bright penny will lay
When he's gone so far away.

01/07/2007